Would anyone like to read my poem about longing? Let me know what you think before I send it!?

Wow...I really, really loved that poem. The imagery and flow is incredible. The only line that I had to reread out of confusion instead of out of complete awe of this masterpiece was "Radiance and memory fade all too quickly, too." the double too's sort of ruin the nice flow you have going. But it's not major and perhaps it was done purposefully? It's a really fantastic poem though. The first two, and the last two stanzas were my favorite by the way. Wow...I can't get over finding this treasure. I really did love it that much hahaha.